Your artistic endeavours

Discussion in 'Films, TV, Music, Books, Etc.' started by Flaming_Tiki_God, Dec 3, 2008.

  1. Uver

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    This ones called Ever Blue, i wrote it last year.

    Ever Blue


    I feel like a zombie in the snow

    My body wants to move but the ice wont let me go

    And the ice is like my mind

    Keeping everything inside

    Stopping me from seeing people so I give up and I hide.



    I feel like a sitcom thats run its last episode

    Like there's no one there beside me as I go down this road

    And the TV that Im running on is only black and white

    The people that Im working with, all they do is fight

    Stopping me from seeing people so I give up and I hide



    Ive fallen faster, quicker down into the make believe

    And no matter what I do it seems that I can never leave

    So I make up my excuses, dont know what else I can do

    Mind and body showing color and its ever darkest blue

    Stopping me from seeing people

    No not even you
     
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  2. keepithowitis

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    Zanker.... Figures.

    Here's the link, it's now up and running..
    http://www.myspace.com/theminorityistightt No offense meant, and this is not an effort. I'd rather not get a lot of s*** for this, just messing around, and not really trying. By the way I'm the first one rapping in both of the songs if you wanted to know which one I am.
     
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  3. Uver

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    Youre pointing to Zanker right?
     
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  4. keepithowitis

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    Yeah, sorry.
     
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  5. Master_Craig

    Master_Craig Forum Moderator
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    Just listened to those raps, I can see why someone might be offended but I won't give you crap for it. I found it kind of funny. It's creative! :)

    Well. I've decided to post up my ten comics so far for my hopeful web comic, but I'm just going to throw this warning up.

    There is coarse language, and there is offensive humour and at times, a bit of graphic material (e.g cartoon gore). This is not meant to offend anyone at all, it is just humour, satire etc. For fun, basically. So if anyone is offended or feels I should take down any of the comics, then I shall do so.

    Okay, so I present you my hopeful web comic, "n3rdc0r3"

    n3rdc0r3 01 - I Disagree (contains coarse language)
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    n3rdc0r3 02 - Defying Physics
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    n3rdc0r3 03 - The Unspeakable
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    n3rdc0r3 04 - Waterworks (contains coarse language)
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    n3rdc0r3 05 - Genetic Projection
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    n3rdc0r3 06 - Dark Side (contains coarse language)
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    n3rdc0r3 07 - Get It? (contains graphic/cartoon gore)
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    n3rdc0r3 08 - Still Alive (contains minor coarse language)
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    n3rdc0r3 09 - I Love Me Some A.I
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    n3rdc0r3 10 - If Only
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    I hope you like my web comics - if they offend anyone or if I am violating any rules or anything by uploading these, please let me know ASAP so I can remove them, and hopefully not get into any trouble. I hope you like them - what do you think? :p

    [Edit] Well.. that's embarrassing.. just realised in the tenth comic, the font is wrong in the second panel. >_<
     
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  6. keepithowitis

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    Hehehe those are awesome! :lol:
    It looks great and it's really funny too. Reminds me of some of the PA strips. I really like it.
     
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  7. Master_Craig

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    Thanks man! I appreciate the kind words, I'm glad you like them. :)

    I'm a huge fan of Penny Arcade and it's of course a massive inspiration and influence for my works. The dialog, the style. I don't want to seem like I am ripping them off, because I feel I'm not. I also want to try my hand at web comics of the gaming and popular culture genre, but Penny Arcade have set the bar awfully high.. which isn't a bad thing, it just shows how far they've come, how much they've accomplished and how great they've become, which is really inspiring me to me. :p
     
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    Dude... that was a valiant effort. In all honesty it's already better than GU comics and CTRL+ALT+DLT. Relax man, that's hardly inappropriate. Just take a look at any sodomy filled topics on the front page.
     
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  9. Flaming_Tiki_God

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    You're quite talented, I say, Mr. Brown. No exaggeration. I really enjoyed those. Comedy is hard to pull off, but you did it well. I too was reminded of Penny Arcade. The artwork was similar.

    Ah, Uver. I made this topic with you and Mala in the back of my mind (along with me just being generally interested in the subject of art). So with that, I must say, Ever Blue was pretty cool. For rizzle. I never say "for rizzle," so you should feel really validated.
    Do you write lyrics? I swear, if I knew how to play an acoustic guitar, I could make that into a cool folk song.
    Good golly gee, I love this topic. :D

    Once again, I'll post some stuff later...
    >_>
     
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  10. Blake_Morse

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    When I'm not working hard at getting you guys cheats and reviews I play in a little band called Apple Pie Hopes (I know I've plugged us here before).
    Soon I'll have a piratical music video to share with you all, but in the meantime there's some clips from our (also) soon to be released live DVD and a couple of songs from our first CD up on our myspace:

    www.myspace.com/applepiehopes

    CDs are available on www.CDbaby.com as well as iTunes and other random mp3 sites.
    We are available for Weddings, Parties, Bar Mitzvahs or Corporate events.

    Some of my older work can be found on myspace as well:

    www.myspace.com/unagirocks

    www.myspace.com/thekingpenguinquartet

    If you haven't heard any of it before, I hope you dig it. Dig it?
     
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  11. Uver

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    Im always nervous about that people wont take me seriously when i start off talking about a zombie. So thank you :D
    And im not very good, my lyrics always sound, well, odd after i write them, but heres one unedited i wrote yesterday

    will this be another one of those nights?
    will i sit here a remember of when eyes lost all light?
    drowned out in the flood
    tears leading way for the blood
    and everywhere you look theres another helpless face
    try to hang your head, think you live with not disgrace

    but the times are over
    the rough youve been through
    and the wait is over
    brace yourself, charge, breakthrough

    and then you feel your lungs catch your breath
    and its almost as if youd come within an inch of death
    and your body feels warmer and the lights seem brighter
    and you can yourself smile as the memory falls farther
    forget about the hopelessness, the hate you hold inside
    embrace your heart, never give up and hide
    cause youll forget the world you suddenly found outside

    but the times are over
    the rough youve been through
    and the wait is over
    brace yourself, charge, breakthrough
     
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  12. Rakon

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    This should become the Master_Craig and friends thread. Great work dude
     
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  13. Master_Craig

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    Ha ha! Thanks, Rakon (and the others - Flaming_Tiki_God and crazycracker22) for the great, kind and encouraging words. I appreciate it a lot. :D

    I listened to the songs by Blake_Morse, they're really good, I particularly like the first and second songs. The first song really made me laugh, "Permission to board!", "Walk the plank!" - oh that's great. I love comedy in music. :)

    I also read the lyrics/poetry by Uver. I don't want to sound weird but honestly, those lyrics kind of got to me (I mean that as a compliment :p), it made me think back on the last few months, with the issues that have been happening involving myself and a friend of mine. >_<

    Great lyrics and music guys! :D

    Also thanks again to those who enjoy my works. :)
     
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  14. -FCM-

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    Edit: Nevermind! They killed the page!
     
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  15. -FCM-

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    Edit: Too long, needs work
     
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  16. Flaming_Tiki_God

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    So Uver, do you play an instrument? Sing?

    Anyway, now it's time to man up and post some stuff. Here's a set of poems I hastily wrote a little over a month ago. It's about artistry as I see it, and how the concept relates to me. It depicts the artist in three different stages. Anyway, it's very appropriate to this topic. The whole set I like to call "Art Recycled"
    Sorry, it's long. It just seems like an injustice to separate them.
    I'm a bit intimidated by everyone here, but enough rambling...


    Art Recycled


    I. The Artist/The Dream

    And one day on lifeless soil you will stand
    In a world of logic and dust
    And the Sun will have disappeared in a cloud of sand
    And your spine a rigid rust

    Then one moment, the land will rise beneath your feet
    In one grand, cataclysmic quake
    And you will find yourself on a green mountain peak
    And all the flora will finally wake

    It's the first week again, the world naked and new
    In a grand blossom of life
    And in the eve of Creation, your feet and the soil will fuse
    And all meaning will be revived

    From such great heights, every shadow is yours.
    Every cell, every sea
    And atop this green mountain peak, you can dig for
    Perhaps just a speck of peace

    And your roots tap into the ground you used to tread
    And convoke some hidden memory
    Messages from the Earth once thought lost and dead
    Reemerged, purified, and free

    Up through phloem and xylem with every bit of force
    Mastery, effort, and care
    You will give the grand inner push with no remorse
    And become just a vessel, bare

    And in a blinding aura floats a piece of the world's soul
    Only from this summoning comes magic
    And for even just fleeting moments, The Sun you will hold
    And you will have given the greatest gift.

    And one day you will find yourself on a green mountain peak
    And all the world will lean in gravity towards your trophy
    One day you will find yourself on a green mountain peak
    With a boombox, a microphone, and some good batteries


    II. The Last Flower of Its Kind/The Whore

    Somewhere in the remains of Central Park
    At passive equilibrium with the world
    Is the one left out of the Arc
    And I can faintly hear a beat
    So somewhere here is a heart
    And somewhere there's the same dream
    To stand atop a mountain peak
    To glow, give, release, and spawn
    But it's here standing withered and nude
    In the streets of New York City
    And whoever passes by, plucks another fruit
    The last flower of its kind
    No seeds they ever withdrew
    Would find the soil in time
    For the fruit was already past prime
    And the root's grasp was gone
    But just to relive the day when the magic appeared
    It will give all, for that's all it knows
    Still somehow, there's always something here
    For you to effortlessly take away
    And the memories of peace leave the atmosphere
    The more it gives, the more it sways
    And as you pluck, You can faintly hear it say,
    "I...I...I wan-"


    III. The Devil/The Messiah

    When I read your letter, I felt inspired. I watched the embers in my heart ignite, and in the flames everything changed. My vision became so clear and bright. This wasn’t the plan, but now I understand how the Sun remains.

    My God is here…

    And here comes the next day, and I will await the time you’ll wipe the gaps away and bring forth a new age. You’re my messiah, and I’m no denier. Bring me the fire, and give me the page. Is this Lunacy? Is this Jealousy? Is this Desire or Satan within me? And on the Judgment Day, I will wait and stay because now I know what I need.

    My God is here
    And I will become.
    My God is here
    And I will become.
     
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  17. keepithowitis

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    Those are really good, FTG. It really gives you an image of the scene, especially the second one. Nice job :D
     
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  18. tigerlily521985

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    Gosh everyone's so talented here :D ... I will see if I can find any of my drawings or other things to post up here later.
     
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  19. Uver

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    Wow FTG. thats really really good.
    Honestly, thats some of the best writing Ive seen in a long time.

    And yeah, Master Craig, my writings tend to be a wee bit darker than some you'll find. Ive been through quite a bit with family problems and Ive only broken through depression this year. Last year i wrote a poem so sad, yet so true, that it made my teacher and other students cry.
     
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  20. keepithowitis

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    I want to archive this once it's been through it's share... or at least sticky it for now.
     
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